Observational Writing

Whaea Eve brought Marnie’s bike into class so we could practise observational writing. After sketching the bike, we had to choose one part to write about.

We were learning to:

-     Order our writing (talk about what the part looks like and then what it does / why it is there)

-     Look closely and describe exactly what we see.

-     Be precise in our language choices (write what it is, NOT what it kind of is)

 

We did this over two days, writing about a different part of the bike each day. We worked in groups to share our ideas and precise language before writing each part. 

Here are some examples:

The seat is a love heart and an oval shape. The seat is pink, purple and blue. The seat is for the rider to sit on and when the rider’s legs get bigger, the rider can put the seat up. Also when the rider gets tired, the rider can sit down.

Sophia

The light reflectors have little cracks like a turtle shell and are the size of two pieces of gum. They are shiny orange. The light reflectors help you when the rider is crossing the road.

Darryl

The light reflectors are scaly orange. The scales are like a snake’s scales. The orange glimmers in the sun like a crystal. The light reflectors reflect the light to the cars so they don’t run the rider over.
Jack